Progressive Poem is Here Today

I have struggled all day with my line.  I don't have a clear mental image of what's going on here.  We have some birds.  We have a beach scene.  We have a springtime riot of crocuses and kites and green.  We have the whispering wind.  And then we have some...horses?  Winged horses?  Hippogriffs?  I'm not really sure, and I don't know who is greeting them - that is, I can't picture the person in my mind.  Most serious of all for my line, I don't know who is gliding aside - is it the horse-like creatures or the narrator?  I do know that the narrator longs to fly, to dive, to run with dogs - she (I think it's a she) would definitely grab the opportunity to ride these winged creatures, if she could.  Then there's still that divining seer on her perch from the previous stanza.  Who or what is that?  Since the seer is on a perch, I thought maybe it was a bird, and maybe the golden wings belong to that bird.  More and more, I'm thinking that the persona of the poem is immobilized somehow, watching birds and a beach and a nearby park where children fly kites, imagining but not able to get up and go.  Is it an elderly person?  Someone who is ill or disabled?  She's dreaming, she's thinking of life, "seen and unseen."  So many things still to figure out in the last ten lines.  And meanwhile, I have to write something...

I decided to give our persona another wish, keeping it in the unsatisfying "I'd" form instead of letting her act on her wish, keeping the action imaginary.  I hope Jan thinks I've made the right decision.

A squall of hawk wings stirs the sky.

A hummingbird holds and then hies.

If I could fly, I'd choose to be

Sailing through a forest of poet-trees.

A cast of crabs engraves the sand

Delighting a child's outstretched hand.

If I could breathe under the sea,

I'd dive, I'd dip, I'd dance with glee.

A clump of crocuses crave the sun.

Kites soar while joyful dogs run.

I sing to spring, to budding green,

to all of life - seen and unseen.

Wee whispers drift from cloud to ear

and finally reach one divining seer

who looks up from her perch and beams --

West Wind is dreaming May, it seems.

Golden wings open and gleam

as I greet the prancing team.

Gliding aside with lyrical speed,

I'd ride Pegasus to Ganymede.   

April

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